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雅思作文该如何开头

雅思作文该如何开头?在雅思大作文中,很多同学只注重主体段的练习和论点论据的提炼,很少有精力关注开头段。作为文章给考官的第一印象,其实雅思作文的开头段更为重要。如何写好开头段,雅思小编为大家详解。

雅思大作文如何写好开头段

大作文开头技巧:

1) 抛弃冗长模板

"使用模板,一律四分"的说法或许有些夸张,但也在一定程度上反映了考官对于模板的深恶痛绝。其实模板套句并不是不能用,而是要运用灵活,不留痕迹。在很多文章中,开头结尾的两个复杂到爆炸的长句在通篇简单句和基础语法错误的映衬下格外醒目,这种稍微有些英语知识的人都会识破的小聪明,更不可能逃过考官的眼睛。

建议学生们积累一些简单实用的基本套句,如:

我们的生活已离不开…

We can not imagine our life without (the mobile phone)。

我们随处都可以看到…/使用…

(An increasing use of machines) is now being witnessed everywhere。

(Fast food such as KFC and Mcdonald's)now could be found everywhere。

…已成为一个不断增长的趋势。

(Urbanization) has established itself as a growing trend。

There emerged a growing trend that (people are pouring into urban areas)。

越来越多的人选择…/倾向于认为…

More and more people are choosing (to study abroad)。

More and more people tend to believe that (more risks than benefits have been brought by air travel)。

…已经不再罕见

It is not uncommon to see that (female leaders are playing an equally important role as their male counterparts in various areas)。

It is not uncommon to see (people performing everyday task and even working at home)。

人们开始意识到…

People are beginning to realize (the side effects of television on family relationship)。

在几十年前,…很少有人会想象到…

Several decades ago, few people could have imagined that (our life would have changed so greatly due to the use of Internet)。

2) 开头具体化

具体化的开头是6分以及6分以上文章的一大特点,即 "要让考官觉得你这个开头是完全针对题目写出来的",要做到这一点,就必须紧紧围绕话题展开。比如下面这道题目:

The development of technology changes the way people interact with each other. In what ways does technology affect the types of relationships people make? Is it a positive or negative development?

(开头段一) As a matter of fact, the issue on the effects of science and technology is a complex and controversial one. Different individuals can hold various opinions due to their distinct backgrounds, therefore, there is no universal answer to this question. In some areas, some people believe that technology has brought benefits on people's relationship, in other fields, others mountain that it has some side effects。

(开头段二) It is undeniable that science and technology has played an increasingly important role in modern society. The benefits brought by such trend are obvious, but problems have also been welled up. As for its influences on people's relationship, I believe the advantages brought by technology outweigh its drawbacks。

(开头段三) Even two decades ago, few people could have imagined that we can perform our daily tasks via computer. Now more and more people are choosing to do the shopping, banking and even work online. So how can such trend affect the interactions between modern-day people? I will give my answer in the following essay。

开头段一为典型的模板式开头,废话多,与话题关系小,毫无疑问会引起考官的反感。开头段二虽然也使用了模板句, 但运用较灵活,不足之处是背景句没有紧扣话题,虽然谈到科技影响生活但没有具体到'relationship'。开头段三语言虽简单但紧紧围绕话题'relationships'展开,灵活的使用了一些简短的小套句,而这样具体化的开头最受考官青睐。

3) 简单即是美

雅思作文考的不是文学修养而是学术写作能力,即如何运用语言有效的表达观点证明观点,因此,简单明了的开头会给考官留下效率高的好印象,而且简单的开头段避免了使用模板的嫌疑也节省了时间。

例:

Science and technology have changed people's relationships significantly, which I believe has more benefits than risks。

It is argued that more risks than benefits have been brought by the development of technology on people's relationships. Personally, I can hardly agree with this opinion.

最后,写作重在练习,所谓熟能生巧,开头段的构思亦是一样。

开头段如何写最吸引人

大作文开头段往往要包含如下几个关键内容,即,介绍背景,引出有争议的话题,阐述对立观点和陈述作者自己的观点。无论使用还是不使用模板,这几个关键信息是一定要包含在开头段落当中的,不然云里雾里,只能是适得其反。

首先It is quite common these days.。。介绍背景,或者用The issue of ... is a complex and sensitive one。这样的句型来引出有争议话题,然后千篇一律地分别介绍对立双方观点,如Some individuals believe that..., while others hold the view that....最终用Personally, I agree with....至此,内容上完美无瑕,但恐怕考官心中已经大大打下“模板”两个字的烙印,这无疑对于想取得6分及以上的同学最不利的事情。下面,我们就来说说到底应该如何突破“模板病”。

例如,一道雅思写作高频题目,讨论到底大学应该教授实用性课程(如计算机和商科课程)还是传统课程(如历史和地理)。我们依然按照开头段应该包含的关键信息开始写作,但是却可以这样轻松突破:

These day there is a growing tendency for college students to have difficulties in finding jobs when they graduate.(介绍背景)A large number of people hold the opinion that lack of practical knowledge, among other things, contributes to this situation. In light of this, they contend that college teachers should lay more stress on practical courses than on traditional ones. (引出有争议的话题,并阐述大多数人的观点)For my part, I am in favour of their viewpoint。(作者观点)

这一段写得非常灵巧,第一句结合题目背景,介绍现如今有一种趋势,即大学毕业生很难找到工作,紧接着作者陈述有许多人认为这是由于学生缺少实用性的知识,并因此提出大学应该更多关注于教授实用性的知识,这一句将有争议话题的其中一方观点用因果链条清晰阐述。最后一句表达作者自己的立场,就是支持前面大多数人的想法。总的来看,这一段只提及了对立双方的其中一方观点,然后表达自己支持这一方观点。这就是一种对于开头段模板的超越,简单可行,只对其中一方观点清晰论证,然后表达自己的立场,无需对另一方观点赘述。这固然超越了八股文一样的“一些人认为……另一些人认为……,我认为……”,而是以四两拨千斤的方式,重点讲解一方观点,然后巧妙表达支持的态度。

另一道可以参考的题目是有关人们认为对于罪犯不应该只是关在监狱里,而应该对他们进行教育和劳动改造这样一道题目。我们依然给出这样一段:

How to handle criminals is a problem that all countries and societies face。(引出有争议的话题)Traditionally, the approach has been to punish them by placing them in prisons to pay for what they have done. Some, however, advocate for trying to make them better with training and education and it seems they may have a good point.

这一段在观点描述上是“出于模板而胜于模板”的典范,范文中将观点一演变为“传统上,人们都采取关监狱这种方法”,这就用陈述事实的方式,巧妙避讳了直接表达有些人认为应该把犯人关在监狱里;而观点二以及作者观点合并为一句,用一个and巧妙连接成一个并列句。开头段关键信息一网打尽。

教你如何写好雅思写作的开头

很多国内的考生受到写中文作文或者传统英语(精品课)教学的影响,写一篇文章的开头段时总是想要尽力抓住考官的眼球,不停地摆弄自己还不成熟的词汇和句型,结果非但没有得到想要的分数,反被考官倒打一耙。那么我们要如何在最短的时间内,以最简单以及最能得分的方式写出好的作文开头段呢?

其实我们可以把雅思写作题目中的提问方式分成四个大类:观点类(opinion essay)、讨论类(discussion essay)、优劣势类(advantage and disadvantage essay)和报告类(report)。每一种提问方式的题目都有自己不同的开头段写作方法。

Part 1 Opinion Essay

观察观点类题目的特征,我们不难发现,此类题型的特征是题目有且只有一个观点。而题目要求我们回答的是“同意”或“不同意”的观点。所以只要确定好自己的观点,开头段就可以写出来。 例如:

Some people believe that living in big cities is bad for health.

Do you agree or disagree?

如果,我们选择同意此观点,可以根据“背景句+直接转述题目+个人观点”的公式。

These days, it is quite common to see that a growing number of people choose to settle down in large cities. (背景句) But some people argue that leading an urban life would produce negative influences on people’s health. (直接转述题目) Personally, I agree with this idea. (个人观点)

如果选择不同意题目观点,则可以用“although”的让步状语从句进行改写,得到:

These days, it is quite common to see that a growing number of people choose to settle down in large cities. (背景句) Although some people argue that leading an urban life would produce negative influences on people’s health, (although +直接转述题目) personally, I do not agree with this idea. (个人观点)

Part 2 Discussion Essay

观察讨论类的题目,可以发现,这样的题目会有两个观点,并且题目要求“讨论双方观点”和“给出自己的观点”。这样的题目中,其实只用在开头段中写出背景句和转述双方观点就好了,至于个人的观点,可以放到personal idea的段落中。如:

Some people think citizens should be responsible for their own health costs. Others think it is better to have a health care system which provides free health services.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

这个题目的开头段就可以写为:

People in some countries are paying an increasing amount of money for seeing a doctor, even for a minor illness. (背景句) But, still, some people assert that individuals themselves are supposed to pay for such fees. (一方观点) However, other people disagree and suggest that it is the government’s responsibility to undertake the health costs for its citizens. (另一方观点)

Part 3 Advantages & Disadvantage Essay

优劣势的题目,一般而言都会给出一个现象或者是趋势,这又刚好和我们开头段中的“背景句”吻合了,所以在优劣势文章的开头段的时候就没有必要再写背景句了,直接转述题目就可以了。但是要表达出自己的“优大于劣”或者“劣大于优”的观点,只需要用一句话就搞定了。如:

Shopping online is replacing shopping in stores.

Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

开头段可以写为:

These days, it is common to see that people prefer choosing online shopping to shopping in physical stores. Although some problems would occur as this trend continues, I believe such development brings more benefits.

Part 4 Report

其实report最简单,因为通常题目和优劣势文章一样,会给出一个现象或趋势,所以开头段的组成部分就只有改写题目。如:

In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes.

Why is this happening?

What are the possible solutions to solve this problem?

开头段可以写为:

These days, it is common to see that the rate of youth crime has been increasing dramatically all over the globe and it is a most worrying issue of modern society.

雅思写作开头段到底应该怎样写

教雅思写作这么多年,经历了所谓的“模版时代”再到“摆脱模板时代”,雅思写作无论是判分标准还是难度上与过去相比的确有很大的变化,当然最直接的就是“分数是越来越难拿”。不夸张地讲,有相当大比例的烤鸭们写作几次奋力屠鸭还是停止在5.5分。经过对大量学员试卷或作业批改分析,目前还是很多学员对所谓“高分模板”有强烈的依赖感。诚然,“高分句型”固然不错,但并不是说将它们随意用在逻辑上根本行不通的作文段落中去!除此之外,我还发现中国的烤鸭们在雅思写作时依然秉承着很多过去的雅思写作模式,例如:开头段(intro)一般至少写三句话(背景,转述题目和个人观点)同时很多学生认为雅思写作的开头段字数控制在50个左右,也就是说开头段的长度超过主体段(main body)。事实上是这样吗,今天喜哥来给大家说说7+雅思开头段的那点事儿。

首先,开头段至少写三句话的这种说法本身就是对学生灌输性的错误。西方国家的写作对开头段实际上没有明确的规定,很多只要你把你的个人观点表示清晰即可。

For example:

Some people believe young adults should undertake unpaid work to help people in the community. Do you think it will bring more drawbacks to the community and young adults than benefits?

一看就是典型的“利弊题”,既然是问做“unpaid work”的利与弊,为了人生观和个人价值观,以及弘扬“正能量”肯定会选择“利大于弊”。那么既然态度这么鲜明,开头段不如直接了当一些,给考官眼前一亮的感觉。

Intro:

I definitely subscribe to the notion that young people should do voluntary or unpaid work to give a hand to the people in the community, because this practice will bring about twofold bonus.

一句话表明态度就好,尤其是definitely一词表明态度的坚定。

其次,我对雅思考生常提到的开头段不要多于50个字或不要超过主体段的长度说法感到很是惊讶,如果是老师提到的,那么这也太中国式的本本主义了甚至是误人子弟。好的雅思作文开头段在西方是没有对长短或字数要求。再说一次,只要把你要说的观点说清楚就好了。当然不要啰嗦。

For example:

Environmental hazards are often too great for particular countries or individuals to tackle. We have arrived at a point in time where the only way to lessen environmental problems is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

环保类的作文一直是雅思写作中的重头戏,本篇就是一个典型雅思辩论类。由于题目中出现了绝对词“only”,我相信烤鸭们已看出这是一边倒式文章,OK,那么开头段就一定在“50”字以内吗?

Intro:

Environmental problems have reached such proportions that people feel international organizations must be set up to intervene in world affairs to resolve these problems. Whether this will resolve the problem which is very unlikely as international organizations are just an extension of human behavior. That is, if human conflicts cannot be resolved at home, then they are unlikely to be resolved at the international level. Nevertheless, international organizations do attract attention to the growing problem of pollution and the destruction of the environment. However, although I respect the aims of the international community to resolve the issue of environmental pollution and support their cause, I do not believe it is the best or only way to protect the environment; in fact, it is only a small part of what is needed in a global initiative.

这样的一个近135个字数的开头段,思路清晰,观点明确整篇下来照样可以拿到7.5分以上。记住写作跟喜哥走,保你写出高分。

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